Sunday, January 23, 2011
Night Burnings
Evening was dying into night
when she said she could do it,
would do it,
the wager unnecessary,
smoking, that is, without
choking, coughing,
a cigar, that is, but
it had to be a good one,
Cuban, preferably contraband,
so the man from Habana
handed his cigar
to the woman from Den Haag,
and she inhaled, exhaled,
smoke rising in circles from
sun-drenched
blood-drenched
fire-drenched
leaves, washed down
with brandewijn, she called it,
burnt wine for burnt leaves;
as she laughed
a single wisp of smoke
kissed
a single drop of wine
glistening in the corner
of her smile.
To see other poems prompted by the photograph, please visit One Stop Poetry.
Photograph by Mike Roemer for One Stop Poetry. Used with permission.
I can see it as a challange. Nice take. You really pound on the nouns. nice.
ReplyDeleteDon't think I could smoke a Cuban without choking either Glynn ;) really enjoyed this different look at the photo
ReplyDeleteBravo! Very creative. Completely different than all the ones I've read thus far, Glynn. Can picture the wager and reaction vividly.
ReplyDeleteLove this!
ReplyDeleteGlynn, this is really good!
ReplyDeleteLove the sense of daring and living on the edge you've put into this, as well as the fine imagery and the very humanizing character detail. A pleasure, as always, to read.
ReplyDeleteYou nailed this one! So can see this as a challenge, so can see him eating his words as the circles rise, that final tinge of the lost wager.
ReplyDeleteCigars are just nasty, yikes. But your poem is quite nice!
ReplyDeleteNice take on a classic scene.
ReplyDeletei like how you started
ReplyDeletewith evening
dying into night
and the sound of
man from habana
and the single wisp
kissed
the single drop
oh...and the three times drenched
i guess i better stop picking it apart
it isa
very cool imaginative story
well done, glynn
What a great and different take on the prompt. So many different descriptions of the picture today, I think I like yours the best.
ReplyDeleteWhat a wonderful and original take on the prompt! I love it! Some really great images here. "Sun-drenched/blood-drenched/fire-drenched" Fantastic use of repetition.
ReplyDeleteThis is one of your best. Strong imagery, a tender movement; you let your psyche into the scenario in fascinating ways! Bravo! j
ReplyDeleteI'd like to see you do a series on the them of "Night Burnings"-- we need direct, honest poetry by men. xxxj
ReplyDeleteReally nice take on this challenge Glynn..love the sun-drenched, blood-dreanched, fire-drenched...great sound to this...well done....bkm
ReplyDeleteI liked it too.
ReplyDeleteSo playful.