Tuesday, July 12, 2011

Umbrella conversation


Our conversation floats
under a yellow umbrella,
words rising in a mild wind.
July hot, and light warm sweat
traces our backs, chests, temples.
Your hand moves away.
We talk in slight murmurs,
soft tones; I watch droplets
slide down our glasses
in iced condensation.
You look away and ask,
when will it turn cool.

This poem is submitted for One Shot Wednesday hosted by One Stop Poetry. To see more submitted poems, please visit the site. The links will be live at 4 p.m. Central time today.

Photograph: Straw Umbrella on Beach by Petr Kratochvil via Public Domain Pictures. Used with permission.
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27 comments:

  1. Louise GallagherJuly 12, 2011 at 7:59 AM

    I feel like I just spied on the most intimate of moments between two lovers.

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  2. MaureenJuly 12, 2011 at 8:34 AM

    You well-convey the double meaning in this.

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  3. katdishJuly 12, 2011 at 9:05 AM

    Sometimes the most powerful lines are the ones that are not written. Loved this, Glynn.

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  4. JofIndiaJuly 12, 2011 at 9:41 AM

    Steady on there, Glynn. You'll soon be attracting a whole new readership!

    (And, by the way, very elegantly written...)

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  5. AnonymousJuly 12, 2011 at 10:19 AM

    in iced condensation

    i love that line...
    i don't know why exactly, i just do.

    but, i just realized i am feeling thirsty.

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  6. Gwen StewartJuly 12, 2011 at 1:25 PM

    So many great sensory details that I was right there. Nicely done!

    God bless you.

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  7. ayalaJuly 12, 2011 at 1:32 PM

    Double meanings...nice write !

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  8. Pat HattJuly 12, 2011 at 3:30 PM

    haha when it's cold we want hot and hot we want cold, never happy are we? Fun write!

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  9. Brian MillerJuly 12, 2011 at 4:01 PM

    oo la la...me like glynn...and yes a double meaning perhaps well played...smiles.

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  10. LauraJuly 12, 2011 at 4:05 PM

    ♥

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  11. AnonymousJuly 12, 2011 at 4:15 PM

    You've truly captured the heated moment.

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  12. AnonymousJuly 12, 2011 at 4:23 PM

    Beautifully captured moment. So many subtle details well described!

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  13. ScarletJuly 12, 2011 at 4:38 PM

    Great capture of a moment ~

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  14. UnknownJuly 12, 2011 at 4:39 PM

    a hot poem indeed... love the metaphor usage.

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  15. UnknownJuly 12, 2011 at 4:45 PM

    Hopefully it never cools :)

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  16. BeachannyJuly 12, 2011 at 4:56 PM

    Intimate or not, I yearn for that cool! And a frosty drink would hit the spot right now. Well done! Condensed metaphor and imagery.
    Gay

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  17. Maude LynnJuly 12, 2011 at 7:24 PM

    Elegantly written!

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  18. LindaJuly 12, 2011 at 7:33 PM

    A beautiful portrait Glynn. You paint masterpieces with your words.

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  19. Joseph HeschJuly 12, 2011 at 9:12 PM

    So many observations and ideas neatly folded into a desceptively small package, Glynn. It felt like a piece of intimate fiction, but with a poet's touch. Really like this.

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  20. AnonymousJuly 13, 2011 at 12:15 AM

    Thank you for the gorgeous imagery.

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  21. RasiiJuly 13, 2011 at 11:08 AM

    comments given in body English and cold glasses

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  22. mrs mediocrityJuly 13, 2011 at 11:13 AM

    love the punch at the end, that way you leave us wondering...

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  23. Cyn BagleyJuly 13, 2011 at 1:29 PM

    Oh wow - the dichotomy between the physical and emotional aspects of this scene are wonderful. "When will it turn cold." That line gives me the chills.

    Cyn

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  24. AnonymousJuly 13, 2011 at 3:27 PM

    very visually charged words.

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  25. ShaistaJuly 13, 2011 at 4:14 PM

    A lovely drink of a poem, slice of lemon for tang, and ice just melting :)

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  26. Vinay Leo R.July 14, 2011 at 1:07 PM

    A beautiful tinge of romance :) Lovely read.

    My One Shot ~ A Poetic World

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  27. Shashidhar SharmaJuly 15, 2011 at 10:30 PM

    Ahh!!! I enjoyed the image that you have created and looks that thing were quite hot there...;-)

    Shashi
    ॐ नमः शिवाय
    Om Namah Shivaya
    http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.com/2011/07/whispers-cuckoos-song-and-smell-of-love.html

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