Sunday, July 1, 2012

The oneness, torn



The oneness, once torn
by a spirit seeking
justice, was lost.
He chose and clutched
the dagger offered;
she found solace only
at the bottom of the pool.
He loved her less
than the desire for revenge;
she loved him more
than the desire for life.
Only in death could
oneness be found.

This poem is submitted for the painting prompt at Magpie Tales. The painting is Ophelia by Odilion Redon.

15 comments:

  1. He loved her less
    than the desire for revenge;
    she loved him more
    than the desire for life.

    that sums it up well now doesnt it glynn....and interesting story it is...

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  2. I'm with Brian on this one - he chose the best stanza...lovely.

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  3. Strong and on target.

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  4. You have the heart of it right there, in the lines Brian quoted.

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  5. So tragic, yet beautifully written.

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  6. Beautifully and succinctly stated, Glynn. I enjoyed this summation of how their love unraveled. Thank you for sharing.

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  7. You captured Ophelia - beautifully.
    P.S. Please dump word verification.

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  8. Ah the juxtapositions come together as one...nice...

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  9. 13 lines say it all.
    You hold the magic Glynn.

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  10. There is beauty in tragedy. I loved this!

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  11. Compelling, moving, tragic . . .
    Beautifully expressed, Glynn, and so powerful.

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  12. This is done so well ... so revealing.

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  13. He loved her less
    than the desire for revenge;
    she loved him more
    than the desire for life

    Perfect summary, well done.

    Anna :o]

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