Two lifetimes ago, the
faces passed and the
names changed; hearts
were set afire and blazed
to the whiteness that comes
from seeing the shadow of
God, the shadow in the burning
bushes in the sacred sands
where he walks.
The sands themselves
flame in echo to the fiery
bushes; the leaves of the trees
ignite in a million red tongues of
visitation.
The mountains combust,
and I am in a playful mood.
The poem was posted for One Stop Poetry, which is a weekly event on Wednesday where all are welcome to participate.
31 comments:
Glynn:
Playful or not, you're really very good at this.
"hearts
were set afire and blazed
to the whiteness that comes
from seeing the shadow of
God,"
beautiful!!
Whoa! I like.
That fire consumed at least two lifetimes
very nicely constructed
I am sooo honored you came to One Shot
Thanks my friend
Beaming from the Moon
woah woah woah!!!!
oh i like this
and the last line
and just all of it!
sigh...really good
really good
the leaves of the tree ignite"
that part. mmmmmm...
:)
that those tongues of flame consume all one day...nicely played...and thanks for linking up to oneshot!
I really like how you ended this. It's a wonderful twist.
Notable how you use your fire metaphor, each line connecting back to the one before: hearts, afire, blazed, burning, flame, fiery, ignite, red tongues, combust.
I had to come back after chewing my cud on this one. I think you'll think I'm weird for saying this, but to me it is the Star Breather reading his own poetry. He's in a playful mood when He creates. Tonight we should have a showing of the Northern Lights. I can't wait to see how he plays with us. :)
Brilliant! A creatively playful mood at that. Cheers
Wow...amazing.
Sorry, I know that's not the most eloquent comment, but I'm seriously stunned. Incredible writing.
I'd like to add my "amen" to what's been said ...
Beautiful images. Thanks. - Bill
Great Inspiration My Friend...
Thanks For visiting...Galen
I like the surprise of that last line -- wasn't expecting the playful mood. But I like it.
I loved the playful lines and your mood when writing this. I enjoyed it was some good subtle passion expressed within. Thank you for stopping by my sanctuary Glynn and hope you keep coming and roam free there're more things there that may delight you~
Wild Rose~
Hu Glynn..play as much as you like..when you write like that..i am so pleased you have shared with One Shot..many thanks my friend and also for your continued support..cheers Pete
There's a great power to this. Excellently done.
take off your shoes - cause you're standing on holy ground... i like this one!
nice imagery, i really enjoyed the line, "the leaves of the trees
ignite in a million red tongues of
visitation." and how you finished with, "The mountains combust, and I am in a playful mood."
excellent!
warm smiles,
You create such vivid images here Glynn. Flaming sands, igniting leaves, red tongues of visitation. I agree that this is a nice addition to OneShot. Thanks for dropping by and visiting in my world.
Katherine
I read this three times and the other's responses. My take is that this is a quite personal poem filled with a sense of intervention. A time when something or someone's who were hurtful were removed and left the writer character somewhat unscathed and free to become him/herself without fear. The imagery is powerful and is consummated in the last line.
Love the easy way this flow to conclusion. Nice piece
Hmmm... I do, sadly, identify! Some people just step forward to keepthe train on the tracks... Nicely written.
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Beautiful piece, well written...the flaming tongues of visitation...combusts an image of a Great God...bkm
The imagery is brilliant~
The poem is strong and poignant!
Your choice of words is quite stunning..
I thought about many things...beginning with reincarnation :), then repentance, guilt, followed by joy and mirth...
Vivid images still flashing in my head after this read... phew!
Nice piece. (The shadow of God follows...as if it were our own.)
wonderful
The last line just spun the whole thing around-- deftly done!
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Oh, this is so good. Like a walk in the beauty of autumn, it flashes brilliant colors before my mind's eye.
hmm, interesting use of words....
a poem that has other possibilities and undertone to us heathen Europeans! Thanks for dropping by and reading Campaigning. I’m drawn to poetry as a storytelling technique and this was about the life of a woman emptied out by the political ambitions of her husband.
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