Sunrise, curtained
date, disappears
hero, clay feet
promise, broken
hope, unrealized
honor, denigrated
hard work, disregarded
championship team, loses
expectation, flattened
commitment, unmet
restaurant, closed
addiction, unresisted
trust, violated
feelings, hurt
summit, unreached
savior, ignored
This poem is submitted for the One Word at a Time Blog Carnival hosted by Peter Pollock, and the word is “disappoint.” To see more posts, please visit Peter's site.
It’s also submitted for Open Link Night at dVerse Poets. To see more poems, please visit the site. The links will live at 2 p.m. Central time today.
Photograph: Lonely man by Anna Cervova via Public Domain Pictures. Used with permission.
15 comments:
Oh, this is fantastic. So many places to find disappointment, but that last one is especially poignant.
Fabulous take on the prompt Glynn!
Fabulous!
Brilliant! Just wow. Thank you.
savior ignored
is a sting
and a reminder
Wow! Beautiful! The rhythm is perfect and the last line just blew me away. Great post!
it all hinges on that last line man....and from there can roll right back to the top if we turn it...
I love what you did here, Glynn
what brian said. and i love the phrase,
"Sunrise, curtained"
A great share on this day before Lent. Thanks, Glenn.
pondering this one ...
No wonder that the poor guy is so disappointed. No Savior!
Excellent Glynn, it's all there. I went to see the HS Varsity Girls Basketball game this weekend. I saw the loosing team smiling as they lined up to high-five the winning team. Not sarcastic smiles. Smiles that said they played well, gave it their all, and walked away, not the losers, but better players just for being in the game.
Took a second read to see "how" to read it as I thought the second word wrapped to the next line. When I re-read it was astonishing. Pretty much captures "modern times".
Excellent piece !
Hope I didn't mess up my comment. Trying again.
You kept me thinkin' which is not uncommon. [and you DO often keep me thinkin'.. not a bad thing.]
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