Sunday, July 1, 2012

The oneness, torn



The oneness, once torn
by a spirit seeking
justice, was lost.
He chose and clutched
the dagger offered;
she found solace only
at the bottom of the pool.
He loved her less
than the desire for revenge;
she loved him more
than the desire for life.
Only in death could
oneness be found.

This poem is submitted for the painting prompt at Magpie Tales. The painting is Ophelia by Odilion Redon.

15 comments:

Brian Miller said...

He loved her less
than the desire for revenge;
she loved him more
than the desire for life.

that sums it up well now doesnt it glynn....and interesting story it is...

Laurel's Quill said...

I'm with Brian on this one - he chose the best stanza...lovely.

JofIndia said...

Powerful.. very powerful.

undercaws.com said...

Strong and on target.

Other Mary said...

You have the heart of it right there, in the lines Brian quoted.

Laurie Kolp said...

So tragic, yet beautifully written.

Linda said...

Beautifully and succinctly stated, Glynn. I enjoyed this summation of how their love unraveled. Thank you for sharing.

Berowne said...

You captured Ophelia - beautifully.
P.S. Please dump word verification.

Tess Kincaid said...

Ah the juxtapositions come together as one...nice...

Debra said...

13 lines say it all.
You hold the magic Glynn.

Dana Dampier said...

There is beauty in tragedy. I loved this!

Martha J. M. Orlando said...

Compelling, moving, tragic . . .
Beautifully expressed, Glynn, and so powerful.

S. Etole said...

This is done so well ... so revealing.

hyperCRYPTICal said...

He loved her less
than the desire for revenge;
she loved him more
than the desire for life

Perfect summary, well done.

Anna :o]

Cad said...

And that's 'togetherness'?