Saturday, April 2, 2011

Expectancy of Hesitation


You asked me to pose so I did,
but I thought what am I doing
I don’t have time for this
whose idea was
the green flower anyway
somehow you caught
the hesitation
it was more than that
the camera pulled my eyes
into oceans, my lifeboat
adrift but longing, desiring,
expecting something
how did you see I loved you

This poem is submitted for the Sunday Poetry Challenge hosted by One Stop Poetry. To see other poems prompted by the photo, please visit the site.

Photograph: Heather Nelson by India Hobson. Used with permission for One Stop Poetry.

22 comments:

dustus said...

Ha! The camera didn't capture the diva being a little difficult. lol "the camera pulled my eyes
into oceans, my lifeboat..."
Excellent transition into finish—wasn't expecting the poem to flip the script like that. Excellent challenge response, Glynn

Kodjo Deynoo. said...

You can tell a lot from the eyes, even in pictures I like this

blueoran said...

You do a great job of hauling us into the core of the photo by seeing its cyans and seafoam green. Those colors are what hallucinate, and the last lines of your poem soar there. - Brendan

Jinksy said...

but I thought what am I doing
I don’t have time for this

The expression on the model's face agrees with your words!

repressedsoul said...

She does actually look a bit pissy, but she's gorgeous and captured beautifully by India. Great challenge response ;)

Brian Miller said...

nicely done glynn...i do like the flip...and i am glad he caught it...smiles.

Christine said...

Beautiful Glynn.

Mama Zen said...

Beautifully done. I love what you see.

BKP said...

Glynn,

This is my first time posting on your blog, but well done. The eyes being referened as a lifeboat adrift was a fantastic metaphor for lost pondering into the abyss that those of us curious enough tend to do.

-Pounds

Maureen said...

This is an image for so many different take-offs. I like yours.

wurdz said...

so many times models exude that diva persona.this captures both divatude and sensitivity.nice write.

hedgewitch said...

Good capture, I also found her image provoking and hard to define, giving nothing while asking/taking. Nicely worked out here, with some very smooth ans speaking images.

nance marie said...

sailing the colour of oceans

James Rainsford said...

Wonderfully evocative take on the photo. I admire the way this moves from uncertainty to some resolution in the certainty love. I really enjoyed this. Very powerful imagery.

signed...bkm said...

wonderful...pulling the eye toward the ocean..great how you incorporated the colors of it here with the colors of love...very nice take..bkm

Margaret said...

...my lifeboat adrift but longing... Great imagination here. Such beauty.

Jerry said...

Absolutely "stop in your tracks" title. The ambiguity of the situation. The longing to be rescued yet not voicing it to the one she loves.

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Ami Mattison said...

I really love this, Glynn!

the camera pulled my eyes
into oceans, my lifeboat
adrift but longing, desiring,
expecting something
how did you see I loved you

An amazing and fantastic twist!

Natasha said...

Really fell into this piece, pulled into the ocean..and absolutely loved the title.

S. Etole said...

I really like this ... the questioning and the question

yellowhousecafe said...

wow ~ I really love where you took this..from being so blase and surface, to going deep and introspective. Wonderful take for this photo prompt!